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高考英語滿分作文名師點評
在日常的學習、工作、生活中,大家對作文都再熟悉不過了吧,作文是從內部言語向外部言語的過渡,即從經過壓縮的簡要的、自己能明白的語言,向開展的、具有規范語法結構的、能為他人所理解的外部語言形式的轉化。你所見過的作文是什么樣的呢?下面是小編整理的高考英語滿分作文名師點評,僅供參考,希望能夠幫助到大家。
高考英語滿分作文名師點評1
【試題回放】一家賓館新開業,為吸引外國賓客,希望在互聯網上進行宣傳。請你用英語為其 寫一篇文字介紹。主要內容包括:
1.地點:距白山入口處500米;
2.房間及價格:單人間(共20間),100元/天;雙人間(共15間),150元/天;熱水淋浴;
3.餐飲:餐廳(中、西餐),咖啡廳(茶、咖啡);
4.游泳池:全天免費開放;
5.歡迎預定。
注意:1.詞數100左右,開頭語已為你寫好;2.可適當增加細節,以使行文連貫。
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides single?person room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 double? person rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!
Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.
【名師點評】
本文開門見山,首先點明了主旨。本文的特點是應用了很多比較復雜的句式,使文章比較出彩。開頭使用了獨立結構交代賓館位置。which引導的非限制性定語從句的`使用也很正確。總地來說,文章句式精煉,是篇不錯的滿分作文。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞1. provide v.提供 2. convenience n.便利
好句All these services can bring great convenience to you and are
very enjoyable.所有這些服務都會給你帶來便利,并且非常的愉快。
評析:bring great convenience,帶來便利。
高考英語滿分作文名師點評2
【試題回放】據報道,7歲的美國女孩Amy Bruce得知自己身患肺癌(lung cancer)后處于極度的痛苦之中,美國抗癌協會(ACS)決定,每當Amy收到一封慰問信,就給她增加3美分的.治療款。
假如你是新華中學的學生李華,請你用英文給Amy寫一封慰問信,主要內容包括:
自我介紹
得知的情況
表示鼓勵
打算為她做什么
祝她早日康復
注意:
1. 信的格式已為你寫好
2. 信中不得出現你的真實情況。
3. 詞數100左右。
4. 請在答題卡上作答。
Dear Amy,I’m Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. I’m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! I’m sure you will win. It is reported that the America anti-cancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.
Yours,Li Hua
[名師點評]
本文依照要求,涵蓋了所有要點。文章使用了高中常見的句式,如I?m sorry to hear that..., It is reported that...等,都比較好。作者對定語從句的使用恰到好處地修飾了文章,行文自然而通順,值得學習。
積累卡片
好詞1.realize v.意識到2.promise v.允諾3.donate v.捐贈
好句1、I?m sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.
我很遺憾地得知你身患肺癌,給你帶來了巨大的痛苦。
好處:which引導限制性定語從句。
2、So, stand up and fight against the disease!
因此,堅強地與疾病做斗爭吧!
好處:擲地有聲,語言準確。
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